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PostSubject: I wrote a poem?   Fri Jun 08, 2007 9:22 pm

I'm not really into criticism of poems, but you can if you'd really like to.
I'm not a great poem writer but it came to mind.
As a matter of fact it's very rare I write one.

I'm not quite sure it follows any poem rules anyway.

Like a rock to a feather,
sit and watch,
the feather drifts in the wind, move about the colors
the gentle way it breezes,
for a child might see this
and pick it up to treasure,
and say this must have been made for me
improbable that they'd see that this is untrue,
the feather belonged once to the bird
it hasn't been made for you
but why does the rock matter
for you don't think of it much
no one would take a picture of this boring rock
nor marvel and speak of it's beauty
but why should they,
for the feather was beautiful
you said "it just seemed like it was made for me"
but then why is the rock here and in my path
it sits, it's dull, ugly in every way
for you'd said it wasn't made for me
though when one must stop to realize
nor was the feather
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PostSubject: Re: I wrote a poem?   Fri Jun 08, 2007 10:39 pm

That's beautiful, Jody, I always enjoyed poems about nature. And this one is a fine example of free verse, too. Smile

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PostSubject: Re: I wrote a poem?   Fri Jun 08, 2007 10:48 pm

I rarely write poems(as I said). So, it was kind of odd.
I was kind of just thinking, then decided I better write it down.
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PostSubject: Re: I wrote a poem?   Sat Jun 09, 2007 8:03 pm

Your good Jody o my gorsh i didnt no that was you hahahaha

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PostSubject: Re: I wrote a poem?   Sat Jun 09, 2007 11:27 pm

I wouldn't know it was me either if I didn't write it.
^That made no sense. ^
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PostSubject: Re: I wrote a poem?   Sun Jun 10, 2007 10:27 am

haha that confused me

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PostSubject: Re: I wrote a poem?   Tue Jun 12, 2007 4:06 pm

For someone who doesn't write poems very often, I think it's amazing. Or even if you did write poems often, it's still amazing. So.. yeah.. good job on it.
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PostSubject: Re: I wrote a poem?   Tue Jun 12, 2007 8:16 pm

Nice!!
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